Dear student

Your essay is awful. It presents the exact opposite of the author's expressed ideas. You also don't seem to know that the essay was published in [fill in the date], which means your assumptions don't make any sense. Your mechanics are a mess, and I suspect your wordy sentences result from your attempt to reach the required draft length. If it weren't so terrible, the essay would be banal. Worse, you often use words you clearly don't understand the meaning of. For example, a child cannot be venerable. Unless he is the Last Emperor, I suppose. You don't know what I'm talking about, do you.

Oh, student. This essay is all wrong. Historically, analytically, and stylistically. Please don't cry again when I tell you this.